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Wednesday, February 28, 2007

A pretty generic poem


(Another would-be song:)

I saw your struggle
My dear, precious friend
I saw you suffer
Seemed like it'd never end
I wanted to give you comfort
Soothe your aching heart
But for once in my life words failed me
I didn't even know where to start;
What could I say?

"It'll get better"?
......but I'm just not sure
"I understand"
......but do I really?
"I'm praying for you"
......but I wish I could do more
I guess I just can't
......tell you what I'm feeling.

I can no longer see you face to face
I know that you're in a better place
And suddenly
I've found my voice again.
I really meant this all along
I hope you hear me loud and strong
because now I know
exactly what to say:

"I love you"
.....The only words that fit
"You're the greatest"
.....Yes it's true
I should have said so
.....It hurts to admit
But I'm still praying
.....Because you taught me to.

I can no longer see you face to face
I know that you're in a better place
And my life, too, has forced me to move on.
And for those words I should have said
Though at times consumed with deep regret
I'm OK because
I know G-d loves you
...more.


(Yes, I know the end sounds a little mixed up. It's because I started with the ending, and then wrote from the beginning, and when I got back up to the end I'd lost track of it and couldn't make it fit quite right again. I have this thing for coming up with good lines only in the shower or while running for a train...)

12 comments:

Bas~Melech said...

How can you indent in blogger? Tab moves you to the next text box, and spaces for some reason don't print.

The Dreamer said...

very nice.
i know it's trying to be postive, but it's a pretty epressing topic for erev purim.
:(

we'll keep you anyway...

Bas~Melech said...

I know. My funny juices haven't been flowing this year yet; too busy. I'm working on a Purim Torah for the other blog, though.

socialworker/frustrated mom said...

Very nice I should try coming up with poems in the shower good idea:.

nuch a chosid said...

sad...

I know exactly what u are saying

Zol shoin zein gut far ala yidden

Bas~Melech said...

swfm-- lol, better stick to having your ideas where they won't get wet and runny.

nuch-- umayn.

Bas~Melech said...

And doesn't anybody know how to indent?

Independent Frum Thinker said...

Very nice, and no, I have no idea how to indent. Sorry.

David_on_the_Lake said...

Beautiful poem...

The way I indent is I make dots white
<-font color=white>.......<-/font >like this

(without the dashes)

Bas~Melech said...

David,
that's smart. I'll have to try it someday.

chana said...

hey - u seem to have felt the need to explain urself in that little paragraph at the end. i actually thought the piece was great - the topic you wrote of is confused at the escence of all human experience.
dont feel the need to excuse urself, u do a great job... just let go and be - it's beautiful as is.

Bas~Melech said...

Chana -- Thanks :)