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Monday, January 29, 2007

I've made a little change (1st stanza here used to be 2nd to last) -- is this better than before?

There's magic in the world today --
as the city still sleeps
looking plain as usual
tiny angels flutter all about
paving it over with change.
There's magic in the world today --
I can hear it in the wind
splashing against my face
as if to shout "Wake up!"
with invigorating exuberance.

There's magic in the world today --
I can feel it in the chill
making my cheeks tingle
I know if I could see them
they'd be pink as fresh blossoms.

There's magic in the world today --
I can see it on the ground
turning concrete into lace
softening angular edges
my feet walk on clouds.

Dawn rises
on the first snow of the year.

10 comments:

Lvnsm27 said...

My neices love to play in the snow and probably my little nephnew too. I like it if I'm all bundled up and warm.

knaidel maidel said...

When it snows, I can feel that little kid in me bursting to get out. She hates to walk straight over it getting to work instead of stopping to play!

dreamer123 said...

beatiful choice of words.

angels in the snow, huh?

sorry for interrupting...

:P

knaidel maidel said...

I added a picture. Meant to do it originally, but published too hastily and then forgot.

nuch a chosid said...

u write very well

davidonthelake said...

beautiful...
I love that..love that morning..when everything is so fresh and pristine..
You wrote this??

Lady Delish said...

Great pic great poem

knaidel maidel said...

Thanks, all!

David-- Did you think I'd plagiarize c"v?! btw, I like your writing, too.

Independent Frum Thinker said...

Very nice piece. :)

kasamba said...

I love how you write, you talented girly!